After the final jury and the discussion with Manolis I looked at my project as a whole ( the projects review setup also helped! ) and have been re-jigging my presentation trying not the reduce my work with the words I was using & shape it better.
My project is not an allegory and I think it was ending up becoming one… So the next 2 weeks are dedicated to tackling this.
I will upload MY STORYBOARD later as it’s not very legible as a photo now… + new work.
I think Fred was also very helpful at the jury in his comments and some good references emergeeed!